Photo 2
Mcpherson woods
The smell of gun powered
the dead bodies on the
ground the sound of
people yelling is all
around
If they had any housesense
they wouldn't send these people
out here seeing the elephant to fight
They made these woods into
a battle ground this is are
woods and they should give
it back clean just like it was
before they came
They don't care about the way
we live they don't care about
each other they came out here
yelling and shooting at each other
These people are crazy I wish
they would go away these woods
was queit and smelled great before
they came.
now it's just a bloodie death zone.
Mcpherson woods
Mcpherson woods
The smell of gun powered
the dead bodies on the
ground the sound of
people yelling is all
around
If they had any housesense
they wouldn't send these people
out here seeing the elephant to fight
They made these woods into
a battle ground this is are
woods and they should give
it back clean just like it was
before they came
They don't care about the way
we live they don't care about
each other they came out here
yelling and shooting at each other
These people are crazy I wish
they would go away these woods
was queit and smelled great before
they came.
now it's just a bloodie death zone.
Mcpherson woods
Photo5 - school
Freedman's man school
As my doors open to start
a new day I see new faces
right away to me I never
seen such colorful faces
These people look different
talk different and act different
If only the paper collar man
would get to know these people
they will find that they are smart
harding working and fun to be around
They learn how to spell thier names
and mines I'm starting to see these
people as my family the days they
don't come i miss them it's dark and cold
when there not here.
with this change I learned alot
I learned to love and care about
people who don't look like me.
At frist I didn't know what to expect
but getting to know them I don't regret
allowing these children to become there best .
Great use of slang in your first poem. Could use a little more background into the battle.
ReplyDeleteYour second poem is very good, and is more descriptive and telling.
Some small errors that you can fix for maximum points. As is 54/60